So it’s been a month since The Circle came out and so far I feel it has gone completely under the radar or it’s just meh. It did come out on a Monday, and heck not even I was paying attention that day, I was at work. But The Ivory Prison has gotten more feedback than it, in the same amount of time. And yes I stalk feedback. So I’ve been thinking about this story, what I missed in the writing process and I think I figured it out.
There is no doubt in my mind this story needed at least an extra three months of pre-planning. The world building and amount of characters alone needed those three months. It started as a simple teenagers sneaking out to see each other story and from there it grew to why did they have to sneak out, to who they were, their parents and it just exploded.
It is too short. There’s enough characters and situations for a full length novel, but I ran out of time. Which is both good and bad. Good because the story is out there and done. Bad because it feels underdeveloped, but if it weren’t for that deadline, I guarantee you this story would not see the light of day for possibly years. Like at least five other stories I have started and still haven’t finished. One of them seven years, 40,000 words and counting.
Secondary characters are not explored enough. I started with two characters and ended with seventeen somehow. It’s ridiculous. The series is called The Heirs of Gorus, and I only include Andrew and Maxwell, Noah and Dianet are generally ignored and they have their own stories.
So yeah it needed more work, but I still absolutely love this story. I love what it became from the original prompt. I love the characters. I love their messed up world and what I can do with it. I can’t wait to tell the rest of their story.
Random Facts (spoilers):
- In the first draft Chloe ceding her spot as heir to Mazwell wasn’t a big deal. Andrew and Maxwell were still going to be separated, but the reason was because Maxwell came out to his father and his father decided to abandon his position to avoid scandal.
- The story was originally titled Window Panes, and Andrew was an expert in climbing down his window to see Maxwell in the woods by their neighborhood because they met in secret constantly. I ended calling it The Circle because it was where they lived and it represented perfectly the situations of the four families, like a secret society. Also because Jessa ( my awesome beta) said that it fit Andrew and Maxwell’s life as a never ending cycle of parents passing down their same fate to their children. I totally meant to do that *shifty eyes*. That said I read City of Bones a few months after I finished the story and there’s this group of people in it called The Circle, so now I kinda wish I’d either read it before or never read it at all.
- Also in the coincidence aisle. About two or three weeks after I started writing the story I read Ascension by Lissa Kasey who requested this story to begin with and in it she has a character named Maxwell. For a few days I considered changing Maxwell’s name, but in the end I couldn’t do it. He was already Maxwell in my head.
- If I had to pick a favorite character besides Andrew or Maxwell, it would be Noah, followed by Douglass, then Dianet. Speaking of Douglass I know about him as much as anyone who reads the story. I haven’t developed a full background for him yet, I just really wanted a character to call Andrew young master ^^
- The story takes place between 2768-2778.
- Andrew’s full name is Andrew Shane Lee Reeves.
- Maxwell’s full name is Maxwell Reinart Torres Vega.
- Maxwell’s last name is Torres because the census projects the Hispanic population in the United States will be 31% by 2060. I can only imagine how large it would be by 2768. Torres is also a pretty common last name.
- Andrew is biracial. His father is Asian and his mother is White. Andrew’s father is named Tehron Lee, his mother is Sheila Reeves.
- Gorus, Nusa, Aurora and Orth are all real places. I used Google maps to check for forest areas, distances and weather patterns.
- I didn’t listen to much music when writing this, but without Holding on to You by Twenty One Pilots, Andrew and Maxwell would have never had a farewell kiss. I was writing the ending when that song popped up and the part between 2:11 to 3:13. I love those lyrics of entertain my faith. The word play between fate and faith. Because Andrew and Maxwell may have lives of fate, but it still doesn’t stop from having faith they can be together.